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Grade: 7th grade Best Vacation: (1) Disney world, South Bend, Indiana ( home of Notre Dame ) (2) Disney World, Cape Cod, Massachusetts Birth Month: (1)May, (2)August Career Goals: (1) Doctor/ Scientist (2): Become a musician or a doctor Favorite Band(s): (1`) Bon jovi, Guns and Roses, Evil dog: (2): Bon Jovi, Gun's N' Roses, Nickleback, Daughtry Favorite Candy: (1) Starburst: (2): Skittles, Resse's Favorite Food: (1)Chicken: (2): Pizza Favorite Munchie: (1) cookies: (2): Chocolate Chip Cookies Favorite Soda: (1) Coke: (2): Coke Favorite Subject: (1) Math: (2): Social Studies Hobbies/Sports: (1) Football, basketball (2): Football, hockey, baseball Pet Peeve: (1) Runny noses on little kids (2): Bad Singing Pets: ( 1,2 ) Dog a cat Siblings: (1) No: (2) one sister i got one sister and two brothers Other things you should know about me... (1) I'm very athletic and tall: (2): I play guitar and am ahletic Iam very athletic and tall two(2) i like to hang out with my best friend randi

Trapped

Once there was a fort called Fort Ice. It was a fort in Antarctica. Two people lived there, Steve and Rachel. They were hired by the PPA (Penguin Protection Agency) to study penguins’ behavior. Steve and Rachel were great friends, but never extended there relationship to anything more. Steve brought along a dog with him when he came to live in Fort Ice. She was a German Shepard named Ami. Ami was a highly trained and intelligent dog. She used to be a bomb-sniffing dog. Steve picked her up in a military base in Iraq. He loved the dog and the military let him keep Ami. They’ve been partners for 3 years. And with this the story begins.

Rachel was sipping her green tea while watching TV while Steve was in the lab looking at some charts when the computer started to beep. Rachel got up and looked at the computer, it was e-mail. “Another one from the boss,” said Rachel. “ Oh, what’s it this time?” Steve replied. “He wants us to explore sector 10” Rachel said nervously. “WHAT!!!!!!” Steve exclaimed. “That’s the red zone!!!!” “I Know” Rachel said. “Why sector 10, why not sector 9 at least it’s safe.” “Well, we better get packing.” Rachel sighed and left the room, as she knew her adventure ahead of her.

The next day they arrived at sector 10. Steve, Rachel, and Ami were facing temperatures of under -20 degrees Fahrenheit. Steve spotted a group of emperor penguins near a large mountain. As Steve and Rachel were examining penguin reactions Ami went crazy and ran into the distance. As Steve and Rachel ran after Ami, they noticed a large boom that knocked all three of them upside down and injured. Before they had time to react, all of the snow on the mountain came tumbling down in an avalanche. It was game over.

As Steve saw the snow come crashing down he took out his hand radio. Now he is under the snow with his radio close to his mouth. Steve is struggling for not only to get a connection with some, but also his life.

It’s been 1 hour since the bomb went off and Steve thinks he’s getting frostbite. He’s been trying to contact help for a long time. Steve finally gets some strength and gets a connection. He said “ I need help I’m underneath an avalanche in the center of sector 10, in Antarctica.” “It’s me, get to a different channel.” “Rachel, is that you?” Steve said. “ Yes, it’s me get some help.” “Are you with Ami?” “ I think I’m close, but not directly next to her, GET HELP!” “ Ok…I love you.” Steve said nervously. Steve waited for a reply. “ I…Err…uh…” That was it. Steve’s radio died.

Four days passed. Steve felt like he was dying when he saw a yellow light from the hole. He saw a man in a big white robe. The man said “ Come with me son.” Steve mumbled “ God?” Steve closed his eyes.

Around 6-8 hours later Steve opened his eyes to see a bunch of people surrounding him in a bed. Steve said “ I…I S’ Saw Jesus” Dr. Kobe said “ What…oh, that was probably your rescuer.” Steve replied, “ Oh, how’d I get out” “ They pulled you out. Oh and Rachel? She’s right over here.” “ Oh what about Ami.” “ Well about Ami, she just had surgery, she should be okay.” “ I hope” Steve said. As Steve said that, he felt something cold on his ear. He looked over and it was Ami!

After Steve got over the fact that Ami was right there he turned over to see Rachel next to him. Rachel said, “ I’ve been thinking about what you said to me. I love you too.” Steve smiled and went back to sleep.

“ Do you Rachel Cortez take Steven Smith to be your loftily wedded husband? To love and to cherish, as long as you both shall live?” These were the words of Father Frederick at St. Francis Church. Rachel replied, “ I do.” And do you Steven Smith take Rachel Cortez to be your loftily wedded wife? To love and to cherish, as long as you both shall live?” Steve looked at Rachel and said, “ I do.” Father Frederick said, “ I now pronounce you Mr. and Mrs. Smith. You may kiss the bride.”

One week later Rachel and Steve spent their honeymoon in Barbados where they spent a memorable vacation. Three years later Rachel had a baby. A boy named Charlie. They lived in Pensacola, Florida because they were sick of snow (who could blame them). Therefore Rachel, Steve, Charlie, and 7-year-old Ami lived happy together and had wonderful lives.

THE END By Kevin F and Andrew S

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) Yes the plot is orignal. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?
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3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) i think the hole think is good 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? its pretty cool that you wied it. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? it was enjoyable. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? yes they do. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? the end of the story is the best will thats what i like.
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1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) Yeah its original 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? It was very interesting
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3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters were very good

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? sure 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?It was good

Belinda HA . Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?