miss+sweetpea

Bufflalo hunt story hi my name is joseph and I am six years old and i have a sister named angelique she is ten years old and my family and try to hang out but its so hard for then they're so busy and i always have to stay and watch are stuff in the tipi will I always go to the forest and look for rocks in stand of stay in the tipi and do nothing. doing nothing is boring for me what I have been doing is going in to the forest and I found this rock this one day and it was beautiful I think it was like it was made that way to look nice well i toke it to the tipi because my mom and sister were coming back with dinner they always go out looking for dinner but she never asks me to go and help her its not fun for me if my dad was here I would beaboul to go with him and look for dinner but my dad got taked by the people that need help to go to war so its just me and my sister and mom hows that for yeah will not so great sometimes talk to my self will it cups me happy for the days but sometime I wanter when my dads coming I miss that old man well and lots of fun to getter if was like I was dreaming but more butter but yeah will i should tell you about my rock that I found will I went in to th tipi I said to my self this rock is going to be my lucky rock for the day so I was really sleepy that i went to sleep my mom woke me up shes said good morning on I got you dinner but you were sleeping so i made your dinner to breakfast eat up because we are going hunting why ain't you taking sis i asked and he said I always come with me. will maybe I will and thats to be how is goes the end

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) can't tell, the spelling needs improvrement. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? just spelling other than that it's good 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story? no 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? everything 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) the spelling needs more work 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

ABOUT ME i am in grade 7 i am 13 years old i am 5 feet i think i am i girl my name is miss sweetpea but thats not my real name i have two brothers and one sister i have a cat and fish lots of them i live with my mom my hair is black and thats all.

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? I would let the story teller stay alive because it was really good. 2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. I really like the names.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. no

