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Grade:7 Best Vacation: going to b.c Birth Month: nov Career Goals: a r.c.m.p Favorite Band(s): Fall Out boy Favorite Candy: all the candy Favorite Food: don't have one Favorite Munchies: All munchies Favorite Soda: root beer Favorite Subject: phys ed Hobbies/Sports: almost all Pet Peeve: When People cheat to get done Pets: no pets Siblings:2 Other things you should know about me...

I was going to bed and. i heard a crab i looked out of my bed room window.and there it was. one small alien It crashed in my back i was so shocked i couldnt even yell. i ran out side a looked at im. i was so scared and it was cold that night. i ran and told my mom but she didnt believe me she said it was a dream. i ran to my back door and asked him where he came from. he did not talk back but then he iad i come from pluto then more aliens came the next week. alot of people found them in their back yards.Now there are aliens on Earth and they are friendly aliens. They have cool technology like their space ship that go so fast. All of the peopf on Earth are still surprised that one kid was the first person to find aliens. The aliens eat a lot of food and the aliens can live up to two hundred years old. All of the aliens live on the Earth now. Do you see them in your backyard?

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) -It was certainly original.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? -We didn't catch on to any characters. Maybe a story line would make the wonderful details make more sense?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? -No, we didn't feel like we knew any of the people.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? -No, the imagination of it all was certainly there but we didn't understand it.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? -Maybe a good suspenseful paragraph would do the trick =] GOOD JOB.

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?yes i would (:

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.it is interesting and you enjoy the story a lot :).

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.yes i would. (