gangstadaddy

Grade:6 Best Vacation:at 7 Oaks Birth Month: July Career Goals:is to get a A in math and join the Cadets on Elphinstone in canada sask regina Favorite Band(s):afroman & soulja boy Favorite Candy:coffee crisp Favorite Food: hot dogs Favorite Munchie:gum Favorite Soda:cream soda Favorite Subject:hanging out with my friends Hobbies/Sports:playing games and football Pet Peeve:nothing Pets:ratriller Siblings:2 brothers and 2 sisters Other things you should know about me:i like to play baseball and basketball and hang out with freinds

Tiktala

Tiktala was a carver she needs to go on a three day journey.She ran into lots of sprits "what do you want to be" she wants to be a alien but first she needs to help a little alien the sprits said "you need to take it back to its mom & dad in space on mars".

She took a hyper speed space ship to get to mars it took two days to get to mars it took her a have a day then she left mars on to her space ship she pressed the extra extra super hyper speed it took her the other half of the day to get back home.

the next day she went to back the sprits she said " no i don't want to be a alien" then the sprits said " ok " then she went home to eat lunch.The parents said "where were you" she said "aventure's".

Starting May 1st (2008): gangstadaddy 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) __It is quite creative!__ 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? __It could make more sense, it doesn't explain that well. You also could have made it a bit longer and stayed in one place for a little while to learn about a scene.__ 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? __You don't say much about Tiktala, you need to let the readers know who she is and what she likes and things.__ 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story? __They definately do, you sure do make the readers imagagine.__ 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? __The start of the story, you need to explain more about her life and things about where she lives and what she likes to do.__

Chloe HA 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? -Yes because the story was very good. Also is very detailed. 2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. -This story was very original. I liked the part when she decided not to become an alien. 3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. -

