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Grade:6 Best Vacation:Going to Disney Land Birth Month:July Career Goals:To work at an Vet Clinic Favorite Candy:Gummy Bears Favorite Food:Pizza Favorite Munchie:Munchies Favorite Soda: 7 up Favorite Subject:Art Hobbies/Sports: I like to play Football, Soccer and Hockey! Pet Peeve: Pets:1 dog = Skipper 2 cats = Mickey and Brandy Siblings: 1 little sister Other things you should know about me...I'm an 11 year old girl who lives in Regina Saskatchewan Canada. I like playing sports with my friends and just hanging out. My favorite color is green, my favorite sport to play is Football and my favorite thing to do is to play or hang out with my friends

First Contact with Aliens I saw a bright blue light out my window way up in the starry sky! I think, "There's Aliens"! I went outside and brought the alien inside. I put it in a cage and started questioning the alien. My first question was what is your name or do you even have a name? He answered back very nervously and said, "Yes, they call me Bozo". My next question was what planet are you from? He said I from the planet known as the ringed planet..... Saturn!

Then Alien looked like a big bug. He was a small green alien with three eyes, three fingers and toes and one antenna with a ring around the top. He came in a UFO about the size of a computer and was blue and yellow. It was circular and it could fly really really high.

Bozo went outside while I was at my friends house and everybody saw him! People were scared and yet also amazed and confused. Scientists were all studying this new discovery of Bozo from Saturn. They also questioned the creature. When he went back to Saturn, his home planet, everyone was wondering about other alien life and other undiscovered creatures that live in Space. I wonder if I'll ever see Bozo my alien friend from Saturn.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) We think the plot is really original.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? We didn't see any problems whatsoever. It wasn't very suspenseful, and the climax really wasn't satisfying to us.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Harvey HA:think its very original and i liked it. i tought a short storys a good story.and i think theres nothing that needs yo be changed. 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) yes

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? I would let the story teller stay alive, because i liked this story. 2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. the name of the alien was funny.... "Bozo" 3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. Yes. Tis was a good story

