HA-Matthew

Grade:7 Best Vacation: Birth Month:april Career Goals: builder and chef Favorite Band(s): famous romance Favorite Candy: ? Favorite Food: ? Favorite Munchie: All munchies Favorite Soda: any Favorite Subject: cooking pe ICT Hobbies/Sports: CRICKET!!! Football Pet Peeve: when people back chat me Pets: 5 cats 3 birds Siblings:2 THE TRUMPLED CAVE “Hey Drew check this out” “Yes what is it” “well you know how deep caves and that are well I kind of” CRKK “Wow Andy are you all right” “Help” mumbled Andy. “IM coming Andy pow im here on top I can hear you” Well get me out please I don’t like this” “said Andy” This must be the entrees” “wait no it aint” “said Andy” “Help” said drew” “So mate whats the problem says drew im here and ready” “WELL GET US SOME HELP!!!” CRKKK “DREW!!! Are you allright im sorry I should had known better.” “Oww my arm oww my leg that’s it were getting out of here Oww” “Drew stay where you are rest just rest ill get some help” “I think this is the exit way ill go for a walk and ill see if I can see any thing wow its about 10 metres high but back there it was about 4o metres high its stairs” 5 minutes later “hey drew get up” “I cant but ill crawl” said drew “Hey ill call for help” Hello this is the SRC department ok sure thing well be right there” “don’t worry Drew there coming Drew what his not breathing. “Hello any one there” ”Yeh im alive my friend is not breathing though” We will come down I got you two lift us up” “Drew wake up you allright” yes I am”

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?