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Favorite Band(s): I like a lot, but right now I really like Boys Like Girls, Taylor Swift (she is the BEST singer on earth), the Jonas Brothers (my friend got me obsessed), Swichfoot and Hedley. I swich like everyday!======

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Hey everyone, my name is Carly and I'm in grade 8! I love reading, especially Lisi Harrison's //"The Clique"// series. She is an amazing author! If you haven't read ANY of the "//The Clique"// novels, then you should because she is an amazing author. But my favourite book of all time is //"Just Listen"// be Sarah Dessen. Sarah Desen is one of my favorite authors of all time. I also really like writting! Anyways, my favourtie colour is purple... I LOVE PURPLE! My room is even purple! I love to play ultimate frisbee! Have you ever heard of ultimate frisbee? If not, it's kind of like football with a frisbee, and without any contact. So it's a pretty sweet sport. When I get older I want to be a criminologist or an author. :) When I'm older, I really want to get to visit Paris and Christmas Island!======

**Prologue;** Cameron Gorham was pretty much the average teenage girl. Her favourite sports were ultimate Frisbee and softball. In the winter, the only thing she loved more then hot chocolate was feeling the adrenaline that snowboarding gave her. But most of all she loved her friends Kady Jones, Adrienne Mulder and Jamie Frasier. The four of them met in grade six during their first year of Stanburry Middle School. Since then, they formed and unbreakable trust for each other and thought that nothing could tear them apart. But, of course, things aren’t always as they seem, one of these girls was up to no good. Why? Well, let’s just say she has her reasons… **Beginning;** “Kady!” Cameron shouted, shaking her friend. “Kady! What’s wrong with you? Wake up!” “Cameron, what is all the yelling for?” Lynn, Cameron’s mom, said as she burst into Cameron’s bedroom. “Mom! Something’s wrong with Kady! I can’t wake her up, and there are red bumps all over her arms.” Cameron cried, she was starting to hyperventilate. “I think we need to take her to the hospital. Now!” “Oh my gosh! Is she okay?” Lynn asked quickly rushing from the doorway to Kady’s side. Kady was lying motionlessly on the mini couch in Cameron’s room. “Quick, go start the car! We need to get her to the hospital!” “Okay.” Cameron stuttered. Clearly stunned that one of her best friends might be dead. So she quickly stumbled down the stairs and ran to the kitchen to grab her mother’s keys. Then quickly hopped into her mother’s BMW and started the engine. Only seconds later, her mother came out the door with a passed out Kady. Lynn then laid Kady on the backseat and hopped into the driver’s seat. “Mom…is she going to be okay?” Cameron whispered to her mom. “I don’t know honey. We’ll just have to hope that the doctors can do something.” On the way there, Cameron’s mind was racing. What was happening? Was this a dream? Would the doctors think that it was Cameron’s fault? Cameron did not deal with stress well…and the next thing Lynn knew, Cameron was passed out in the passenger’s seat of her car.

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Adrienne Mulder sat in her kitchen that same Saturday morning eating toast and watching the weather forecast for the day on the mini TV that was on the refrigerator. //“Today, put you’re shorts on and get outside! We are expecting the weather to be somewhere around 20 degrees Celsius today! Great for all you golfers wanting to hit the green!”// the weather man announced. “Twenty degrees isn’t bad for a mid day in May!” Adrienne’s mom Ronda said cheerfully as she poured her smoothie out of the blender into her favourite mug. “Don’t you think dear?” “Yeah, not bad at all.” agreed Adrienne. “Do you think Cameron, Jamie and Kady could come over today?” “Sure honey.” “Thanks mom!” Adrienne said picking up the phone to call her friends. “I’ll call Cameron first.” decided Adrienne, “I’m pretty sure Kady would still be there since she slept over at Cameron’s last night.” Adrienne punched the numbers on the keypad, and then waited for it to start ringing. After a while, the answering machine kicked in. //“You have reached the home of Brett, Lynn and Cameron. We’re not home-”// “That’s weird.” Adrienne mumbled hitting the ‘end’ button to disconnect the line. “Where would they be? Cameron always answers her phone. Maybe I’ll call Jamie.” But just as Adrienne punched in the last number, her phone line got cut. “Okay, this is really weird.” Adrienne thought, and then set the phone back on the cradle. Now she was starting to worry. But maybe the phone being disconnected was just something going wrong at the electric company. So since she probably wouldn’t be able to reach her friends for a while on her home phone, she went up stairs to her room to grab her cell phone. But when she looked on her dresser, the charging cord for her phone sat alone. No cell phone attached. “But I know I left my cell phone charging here over night.” Adrienne whispered to herself. She quickly glanced around the room, hopping to see her pink cell, but instead noticed that her window was wide open, which was weird because Adrienne hadn’t opened her window since last summer. So she walked over and stuck her head out the window. As she did, she saw a person in a black sweater scrambling down the back of her house and onto her deck. The figure then jumped quickly off her deck and on to the lawn, and then raced into the woods behind her house. Adrienne stood still in her bedroom, head still out the window. She wanted to yell, but couldn’t. She was shocked because she knew that she had just been robbed. How did she know? Well, because she could see perfectly well her customized, sparkling turquoise cell phone case hanging out of the theft’s sweater. ---

When Lynn reached the hospital, she took a water bottle from the cup holder and dabbed some on a napkin and lightly pressed it to her daughter’s forehead praying that she would wake up. One unconscious girl was enough. Slowly, Cameron’s eyes began to flutter open. “Mom, how’s Kady?” was the first thing that came out of her mouth. Lynn reached over and embraced Cameron. “I’m not sure dear, we just reached the hospital. Are you okay?” “Yes, I’m fine. We’ve got to get Kady into the hospital now mom.” Cameron said, already opening the back seat of the car. “Yes! Of course.” The two pulled Kady cautiously out of the car and carried her carefully into the hospital and rushed to the front desk. “Excuse me ma’am, but we’ve got an unconscious girl here, who isn’t breathing very well.” Lynn cried, pushing the others in line out of the way. The wide eyed secretary replied, “I’ll get you a room right away!” The secretary waved to one of the nurses standing near by, the nurse then took Kady and dropped her onto a stretcher. Then at quite a fast speed, she rushed her down the left hallway. “Follow me you two!” she beckoned to Lynn and Cameron. They followed. When they reached the room the nurse was going to put Kady in, she turned to Lynn and Cameron to ask what had happened. As the nurse lay Kady down on a bed and called for more doctors A.S.A.P., Cameron explained that Kady had been over for a sleepover, and that morning she went to wake her for breakfast, but Kady just wouldn’t wake up. “Alright,” said the nurse when Cameron was done, “someone needs to call this girl’s parents to inform them that their daughter is here.” “I will.” offered Cameron, pulling out her cell phone. Cameron called Kady’s mom. Her parents were divorced, and she lived only with her mom. When her mom answered and heard the bad news, she started crying, but said she would be over right away. In a matter o f minutes, the screeching of tires could be heard from inside the hospital. Then a very flustered woman rushed into the waiting room where Lynn and Cameron were waiting for Kady’s results. For a moment, Cameron did not recognize the woman but then realized it was Kady’s mother. “Rachel! Over here.” Lynn said waving to Kady’s mom. When Rachel reached the two, she demanded to know where her daughter was, and what had happened to her. “The doctors are taking some x-rays to find out what the problem is.” Lynn explained. Then Cameron explained for the second time what had happened. “Rachel started to calm down a little once she knew what was happening. Then after a few minutes of complete silence, the nurse that had taken care of Kady earlier walked into the room, a grim expression on her face. “Are you Kady Jones’s mother?” the nurse asked Rachel. “Yes, I am Rachel Jones.” Rachel replied. “Did your daughter have any allergies?” “Yes. She was deathly allergic to nuts, but only if she ate one. Although I’m positive Kady wouldn’t eat nuts, she knows what could happen.” “That confirms it then.” the nurse said with a sigh. “I am very, very sorry to report this to you. But your daughter is dead.” The silence that was there only minutes ago was then broken by the hollers coming from Rachel Jones.

It took almost three hours to calm Rachel down. Lynn decided that they should probably let Rachel be alone with Kady. Cameron hadn’t moved and barley blinked the whole time, so Lynn said she would go get the car and Cameron could wait in the lobby. Since Cameron didn’t say anything. Lynn left to get the BMW. Cameron was still shocked. She had no clue what to think. And when her mom pulled up near the doors, Cameron had nothing else to do but leave and walk out of the hospital. She was so stunned that she forgot to look both ways before crossing the street. So when she caught a glimpse of a car coming at her from the left when she was halfway across the street, she didn’t even have a chance to think when the car driving at top speed ran into her. Yes, ran into her on purpose.

---   Adrienne rushed down her stairs and out the back door. She quickly looked around the woods in her backyard. She then saw the figure about a yard away, clearly thinking that he or she was concealed by the trees. Adrienne was quite fast, so she ran to tackle the figure. As planned, the person fell over and when Adrienne turned around, she realized to her horror who the person was. “Jamie?” Adrienne said, quite disgusted. “Uh, yeah. Hey Adrienne.” Jamie stuttered. “What on earth were you doing stealing my cell phone! And I bet it was probably you who cut the wires for our phone too!” Adrienne yelled. “Yeah... that was me.” “Why on earth would you do that?” Adrienne asked furiously. “Well, now that you’re here all alone. I have you right where I want you. I planned this to happen.” “What?” Adrienne said quite confused. “Well you see, if you really have to know.” Jamie began. Then flipped over and shoved Adrienne on the ground. “Now that I know you can’t escape. I guess I could tell you.” “Get off of me this instant!” Adrienne yelled. “Well, I would, but that would just ruin my plan. You see Adrienne, out of our little “clique”, I don’t really have any spotlight. You’re the sports girl, Cameron is the funniest and by far the smartest, and Kady is the prettiest. So this may seem strange to you, but my plan has always been to be the most popular girl in high school, and as you know next year will be our first year there. And let’s face it, you other three are quite frankly, my only competition. So what better way to get rid of my competition then somehow making them, let’s say, disappear? But don’t worry, you aren’t the first who will disappear. According to my calculations, Cameron and Kady are already dead. I put crushed nuts in Kady’s smoothie when she was at my house yesterday, and my older sister, who is graduating this year and wants me to be popular, just as she was. So she agreed to ‘accidentally’ run Cameron over. How great of a plan is that? ” Jamie exclaimed, laughing. Adrienne was so confused. What did she mean Cameron and Kady were dead? All to be popular? There had to be another reason why someone would kill people. But before Adrienne could think of anything else, she felt something sharp dig into her leg. There was so much pain. And with that, everything went blank. Of course, after a while, Adrienne’s family went looking for her. But found only her dead body. **Epilogue;** With her competition dead, Jamie did become the most popular girl at high school. She also won prom queen at her prom. The deaths of Cameron, Kady and Adrienne was the top new story for seven straight weeks, but then other stories came, and theirs went. No one found out that it was Jamie, so she got away it completely, without even feeling any regret because her plan went right according to plan. Like Adrienne suspected seconds before she died, Jamie did have another reason for killing the three girls. You probably want to know what it is…but it’s not like that’s any of your business.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) We thought it was a great story. What made it great is the suspense. good job! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? omg awesome story nothing needs to be changed and it was satisfying 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? well lets see...i would not want wit jamie and it was great suspense. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? we had to think of what might happen next and was very interested to read more! 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? nothing. great story. by the way what were the other reasons for jamie killing the girls?

Response to number 5. question from me: Ummm, I'm not really sure her other reasons for killing the girls! I thought it would just be like an added twist! Was it?