HA-Teika

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“Hey stupid! Yo Fatso! We’re talking to you!” “What” Your fat” “don’t be such a bully” “lets get him” He starts to cry he goes home on the way there was the bullies again they bash him again he runs home as fast as he can he has all burses all on him he mum says “what’s amateur” “bully’s” he sad then his mum called the school but then nock nock “who is it” it’s the cookie girl he gets some whops he had fallen over and lost the money I will get it then they lock at each others eyes and they fell in love. They walk to school with each other every day from then on. until the new people come to school then she start to walk with she starts to walk with then he came bulled again. She now throat it was funny she became a bully he sat by him self everyday but he tries to play with them again and again he sits by him self until he get really angry and starts stand up for him self then people play with him and he become to be a lawyer he was really good smart person. Then he was rich and famous. Based on a book I had read.

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?