HA-George

  

G’day, my name is George
 * Grade: 6 **
 * Best Vacation: to Queensland **
 * Birth Month: September **
 * Career Goals: Be a famous tennis player **
 * Favourite Band(s): Green day **
 * Favourite lolly: Starburst **
 * Favourite Food: Mexican **
 * Favourite snack: Hot Chips **
 * Favourite soft drinks: lemonade **
 * Favourite Subject: sport **
 * Hobbies/Sports: Tennis and AFL football **
 * Pet Peeve: to many jobs **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">Pets: Got a cat and fish **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">Siblings: Got three sisters **

<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">**Siblings: Got three sisters**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">Favourite Subject: sport **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">Hobbies/Sports: Tennis and AFL football **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">Pet Peeve: to many jobs **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">Pets: Got a cat and fish **

Blair and I arrive at the indoor tennis in Warrnambool. “I’m so nervous” I say to Blair as we park in the car park. “Come on George”. Yells Blair. Blair and George just walk in the door when Matt said you’re on. “What!”I say Matt said “didn’t you now that you boys know that you are competing in the older age group because there am to many pairs in the u11’s so I but you up in the u12’s”. Said matt. Blair and George were having a hit against there apposition. The umpire says that we have to start. George serves first on his last serve his strings break. George ran to his bag to get his another racquet. When he gets to he is looking around in his bag but he can’t find it. He runs back to his Blair and told him that he can’t find it. Well I can’t help because I’m already using my spare. Then out of the crowd come Lleyton Hewitt and presented me with a racquet. Blair and George won the comp and George got a racquet.

**Starting May 1st (2008):** unit_666 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) No infece or anything but it needs more pazazz It is not nteresting to me because I dont exactly connect with it. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The raquet Broke Could change into your serve was so powerful it knocked him over. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters seme nice and fun but to seriuos about tennis. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? no I think I wrote what I felt 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? It could be longer

sms group 8 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) This was very interesting but it needs a bigger and more exciting climax. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? It was satisfying but I would add more suspense.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Yes they were extremely realistic. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? No I dont but I could with a little more added.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? The end and climax
 * Rachel:**

This story was a little cunfusing to me. I didn't reall understand it very well. I feel that your caracters weren't realistic it also seems like they are your pets. They have to have there own mind and sence of humor. There also needs to have some more dialogue. But I thought that it was a really good story

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.