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Grade:7 Best Vacation:When I went to DuckMountain in the summertime last summer Birth Month:April Career Goals:Nurse/Doctor Favorite Band(s):Evanescence Favorite Candy:Sour Skittles Favorite Food: Frozen Yogurt Favorite Munchie: Poptarts Favorite Soda:Root beer Favorite Subject:Language arts Hobbies/Sports:Reading,Science Health Pet Peeve:Shayla Pets:5 birds Siblings:5 other siblings Other things you should know about me. I do not like Spiders, Mosquitos,Tube tops,Buttertarts & fake juice crystals. I like real juice made from real FRUIT. I have a bad temper when it comes to someone annoying me by poking me or saying something over and over. Also when someone hits or slaps me. I cannot stand people who always think they are better then me in different ways that i cant compare.

I don't like to be doing stuff i am told to do. I happen to like doing stuff my way and not their way. I like doing experiments and other fun activities I have never tried before. I love listening to music in my own time and shopping for new things. It makes me feel happy in a way i am usually not.

My favorite word is fierce. It just.. sounds so cool when i say it I love wearing necklaces and bracelets. When someone tells me somethings wrong.. i find a way to make it right. My favorite color is purple. I am not one of those people who judge or saying anything mean to one another because i know its wrong and I know it hurts the other people being called names they do not like.. Also karma.

Dream..

One dark late night a girl named Sam was getting ready to go to bed. She brushed her teeth and hair got into her pajamas and went to bed. She turned off her light and went underneath the covers. She fell asleep and very fast. Someone opened the door to her room.. Surprisingly she didn't wake up.. he was holding sleeping gas in one hand and a bag in the other.

He was dressed in black and wore a mask, so he could cover himself up without anyone knowing. He checked and looked all around the room to find any cameras or anyone watching so he closed the curtain. He moved quietly as he could to her bed picked her up and put her into the bag. Several hours later she awoke tied to a tree. In the middle of the woods.

She was about to scream but she noticed there was tape across her mouth. She thought to herself for a minute calm down don't panic take a few breaths and relax. She closed her eyes and let out an agonizing moan. She tried setting herself free but couldn't. She wiggled her arms and legs and finally gave up.

She struggled so hard and tried pushing herself free. She looked around and saw a tent. Next to the tent was some wood lying on the ground. She looked to her left and saw a man coming her way He put a saw on the ground and walked towards the tent.

Three minutes later he walked out of the tent with a chair. He started walking towards her. She shook her head and she started to cry she tried screaming through the tape but all that came out was a little mumbling noise. He lifted up her feet and put the chair beneath her feet. He picked up the saw and placed it on the chair next to her feet. She scooped the saw with her feet.

She took the saw and started cutting the chains. After several minutes later she got herself free. She jumped off the chair quickly and ran. She went out into the woods and tried searching for someone.. she was panting really hard as her chest started to pound her legs felt as if they were ready to break and shatter into a million pieces she took a deep breath and stayed quiet for a while she listened to the birds chirping all around her and she stopped moving suddenly when she heard a twig snap and quickly looked behind her.

She saw the man and started running. He ran after her. She lost control and tripped on the root of a tree.He was right behind her. She looked back at him.

He had a shovel in one hand and a gun in the other. He pointed the gun at her and all of a sudden.. Sam woke up in a panic. She looked beside her and saw Kayla trying to wake her up than Sam said silently.."Wow that was a really bad dream," She looked to the other side of her and saw the same man in her dream and her eyes widened and she screamed. Then the man bit her head off! But some how she was still alive!

She tried running to the hospital. But Kayla was holding her back. So Sam said Kayla why are you doing this to me? Then Kayla spontaneously let her go. Sam ran like the wind but the man was right behind her.

Then sam stopped and her legs wouldn't move any more Sam turned around and saw the man coming closer and closer. Then all of a sudden Sam woke up. this time when she woke up there was no one in her room and it was pitch black but she could kinda see her closet.It was shut tight. Yet some how it opened Sam screamed and put her head under the covers.

She could hear some ones foot steps on her hard wood floor. Who ever was in her room pulled the covers off her head. She looked up and saw her mom. Her mom looked surprised and asked her what was wrong. She took a deep breath and said.. "I had a bad dream,"

joshuah-bel-HA. nice dream, i really like it. what gave you that idea. bye.

SMS Group 3 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) We really liked this story. Kidnapping a person in a nightmare is //so// original. We think the plot was very creative.
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? The problems the character faces are rather quite life-like. It makes us feel like we're about to be kidnapped by a weirdo in a mask! We thought that it was very suspenseful, but then the ending just left us wondering what would happen next.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are somewhat life-like and likable. Unfortunately, you only described the kidnapper. Why didn't you describe the main character? That would have made the story more interesting.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? We didn't hear the story, but we could definitely saw the story.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? The ending could definitely use some work. Other than that, it was really good.

Joshuah Bel - HA . Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.

