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1.Chris 2.Christopher 3.Daniel 4.Tristan

Grade:6th Best Vacation:1.Disney Land 2.China 3.Hawaii 4.Japan Birth Month:1.August 2.June 3.November 4.October Career Goals:1,2,3,4.Don't have one Favorite Band(s):1.System of a down,3 doors down,Three days grace,Needles,Flow,Chevelle,Disturbed,Tool Favorite Candy:1.Japan candy 2.Chocolate 3.Nerds 4.Gummy bears Favorite Food:1.China food and ribs 2.China food and ribs 3.China food and ribs 4.japan food and ribs Favorite Munchie:1.anything 2.anything 3.anything 4.anything Favorite Soda:1.coke 2.coke 3.fanta 4.Root beer Favorite Subject:1,2,3,4.PF Hobbies/Sports:1.soccer,games,TV,Computer 2.soccer,games,TV,Computer,basketball 3.Soccer,baseball, basketball,football 4.fox racing, football, BMX, skateboarding, soccer Pet Peeve:1.parents 2.little bro 3.big bro 4.little bro Pets:1.i got a dog and cat 2.I don't have animals 3.cat 4.2 dogs Siblings:1.none 2.brother 3.brother 4.brother Other things you should know about me...

Story Draft
Millions of years into the future, there lay a lonely planet called Planet. "King Bob what should we do about the small but useful planet filled with humans?" "I heard that they were great story tellers." "Let me hear one, and perhaps I would spare the humans," wondered King Bob "Bring in a human!" shouted a guard. In came a human, his name was Joe. He was nervous, but his race depended on him for survival, and he began. Once upon a time, Lord Junk, a very ruthless king of a very dirty universe insulted the panzicas, civilians of the universe, and a very brave panzica killed the Lord's brother. Lord Junk became very angry and ordered his guards to capture and kill the panzica, who's nickname was Gangster Wangster. Gangster Wangster was scared and flew to Earth to hide. He went to a school called Lawson and was not accepted. The thing called "Bullies" flushed him down the toilet and he flew out the pipes and into his own universe. One of the guards walked into a house to search for Gangster Wangster. Suddenly, Gangster Wangster dropped through the metal ceiling and landed on the guard, instantly crushing him. Gangster Wangster ran for his life. He tripped over a small rock and his leg popped off. The guards quickly rushed and threw him into trison. In trison, he popped off another leg and freaked out the guard, took the keys, and escaped. He was now down to six legs and eight arms. He hot-wired a pink Pinto and flew to Earth and crash-landed in New Mexico's white sands. Now he lost three arms, and yet again, another leg. He was now down to five arms and legs. Gangster Wangster's pursuers quickly arrived to Earth too, blasting away any obstacles in their way. Soon Gangster Wangster was surrounded and he was forced to do a back flip over all the pursuers, popped off an arm and started whapping the pursuers. The chasers were frightened by the arm that was ripping them apart. Suddenly, Lord Junk's favorite general came and used a napalm launcher and blew Gangster Wangster up. Gangster Wangster died. The End, Gangster Wangster now had no arms and no legs. "I think that was an interesting story, sir," replied the guard. "Very well, I am being generous today and would spare them," answered King Bob, who was still thinking about the story. "Thank you, King Bob, I will now go," said Joe. Then King Bob did a super awesome back flip.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Carly-

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) Yes, I thought the plot was very original! It was alright for interesting.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I thought that the story was a little confusing and hard to follow.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I didn't really get to meet very many of the characters very well, so I can't really say anything.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? The imagery and details were very good! So it did help me see and hear and experience the story, though as I said before, kind of hard to follow.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? Again, make it more clear.