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First Draft "Twaries"

Teg and Get were two very clever girls. They lived by themselves and managed on their own. They lived in the woods, without parents. They depended on the trees, the leaves, and the gas station down the road.

The women who worked there were very nice and gave them food. The thing is that Teg and Get did not know each other.

One day Teg went to the gas station for some food and Get just happened to be there.

Miss Tea the gas station owner introduced the girls to each other.

“Teg this is Get, Get this is Teg” said Miss Tea.

They looked at each other and said in sync “Hi”

They took their food, said “Thank you” and ran off into the woods. They spent the whole day together. Teg and Get both lost their parents when they were little. They didn’t have a house and went to the gas station for food. They both loved animals, too. It was weird how they had about the same life and liked the same things, but they still enjoyed each others company and became best friends.

One day, Teg and Get were playing tag and it was Get’s turn to tag Teg. Get pointed her finger and said “I got you!” when all of a sudden something blue shot out of her finger. Teg fell to the ground and yelled in excitement “How’d you do that?” Get didn’t know what had just happened. She grabbed the half of an old, heart necklace hidden under her shirt and ran away. Teg ran after her.

After a while of chasing Get, she stopped dead in her tracks with Teg right behind her. Teg noticed the half of a necklace Get hid under her shirt. Teg had the same one but the other half! Teg told Get about her half-heart necklace and she took it off and showed her. Teg’s half of the heart necklace said “Twar” while Get’s half said “ies.” They put them together and it said “Twaries” The only way to be a twarie was to be a twin. A twarie is a twin fairy.

“OH MY GOOD GOLLY GOSH” said Teg.

“What………No………How?!?!???……I’m so confused” said Get.

“How are we twins? We look nothing alike” said Teg.

Well there has to be a name for this non-twin-ly-ness. We don’t look the same so it has to be a weird name” said Get.

“We can go to the gas station and ask Miss Tea. She’ll know for sure” said Teg.

“THAT’S A GREAT IDEA, WELL WHAT ARE WE WAITING FOR? COME ON LETS GO!” yelled Get.

When they arrived at the gas station, they asked what their nontwiness was called. Miss Tea answered “Its called fraternal” confused Get said to Miss Tea “so we are fraternal twins?”

“Yes that’s what it is, fraternal but why do you ask?” Said Miss Tea.

“We ask because, like I said we are… well we are twaries” said Teg.

“What is a twarie?” asked Miss Tea

“It is a twin fairy.” Said Get

“We are twins and faires.” Said Teg

“Okay I’m still confused but I guess ill learn to understand” said Miss Tea.

“Okay good.” Said the girls The girls went back into the woods and started talking. They were talking about magical powers.

“How did we get these “powers” and how are we supposed to use them?” asked Teg

“I have no idea but I’m tired so lets sleep on it” said Get

“Alright. Fine. Goodnight Get” said Teg

“Goodnight Teg” said Get

The next morning the girls woke up and were shocked by what they saw.

“WHAT IS THAT??” yelled Teg

“I have no idea” said Get with amazement

It was a purple winged object flying above their heads. She had a bright pink dress on that was jaggedly cut at the end and one strap at the right shoulder, and a crown of pale purple berries. She landed in front of the two girls she looked up and said “This may be a surprise to you girls the new powers will spin your world, but I’m here to help you learn how to control them and as you get older you’ll learn how to know them.”

“My name is Purple Puffle, but you can call me Puff.” Said Puff.

“Why do you keep rhyming? Is that your power?” said Teg.

“No its not when I was a little tot I was cursed by a spell and only when I die will it repel” said Puff.

“So let the day begin and put us on our way, for it will not be long until you sing this song: nebulous, missile, insatiable, SMOSH! To learn spells like Mish Mosh” said Puff.

“Huh?” said Teg.

“Ahhhhhhh!” screamed the girls.

“Where are we going?” asked Get.

“You’ll see when we get there, shush! It will change when we get there.” Said Puff.

Up and up these “Twaries” went, through clouds and clouds. The girls were so freaked out but they clung to Puff’s dress, and just when they thought they might let go, they arrived. They had reached their destination. FAIRY ACADEMY a sparkly archway declared. Through this archway, there was countless fairies, all of them, eating and dancing and training. Fairy Academy was like a very nice boot camp, with cute clothes, yummy food, and lots of nice but harsh counselors. “WHOOOOAAA” the girls thought. “Welcome to the one, the only FAIRY ACADEMY.” Declared Puff. “Here, I will teach you lots of stuff, to do with your powers, you see. This is where you girls will make history!” said Puff.

The girls listened to everything that Puff had said. They kept on trying even I they didn’t get the spell right. The day was almost over and the girls were exhausted that their fingers wanted to fall off. “Get I think that…we… are.. almost.. done” Teg said exhaustedly.

“Oh … well… I hope so!” said Get equally exhausted.

“Girls your day is done. Its time to go home and have some fun.” Said Puff.

“Bye.” Said the girls and they were on their way.

The girls left excited and ready to play with their powers.

“Well I’m excited to try out our powers.” Teg said.

“Yeah. The only thing is we don’t know everything and we will probably need to go back.” Said Teg.

Get pointed her finger out and…….

Teg and Get were two very clever girls. They live and managed by themselves in the woods with no parents…

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) well its not the kind of story I have ever heard before so yes I think its very original like who ever comes up with twaries (twin faries)! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? the characters face the complication of being twaries twin faries and they didnt even know it the tea lady just introduceds them and they were exacctly the same theyre parents died when they were young they both went to the store were the tea lady worked! I think your story has intrests but maybe you ccould add some more of it beccause your storys already good but maybe if you ccould just add a little bit more your story would be exellent! not that its bad or anything 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of cha and the racter from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?
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4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Jayden HA . Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? u could of used less charectars

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? they were very

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Brad HA Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?