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Nitisha, Sri, Caroline, August, Kalen Nitisha: I LOVE DOGS!!!!!!!!! Sri: I LOVE ANIMALS!!!!!!!! Caroline: shopping, volleyball
 * Grade:** all of us-6th grade
 * Best Vacation:** Nitisha:Disneyworld, Sri:San Diego, Caroline:Paris, August:Las Vegas, Kalen:Antartica
 * Birth Month:** Nitisha:February, Sri:February, Caroline:November, August:January,Kalen:January
 * Career Goals:** Nitisha:Doctor, Sri:Doctor, Caroline:Professional Volleyball Player, August:Actor/Comedian, Kalen:Chemist
 * Favorite Band(s):** Boys like Girls, Brick
 * Favorite Candy:** Twix, The Three Musketeers, Twizzlers, Milk Duds, Smarties
 * Favorite Food:** Chinese Fried Rice, Pasta, PizzaMyHeart, Grains, Sourdough Bread
 * Favorite Munchie:** Cookies, Brownies, Candy, Chips, Chocolate
 * Favorite Soda:** Sprite, SevenUp, Dr.Pepper, Fanta, Pepsi
 * Favorite Subject:** Lang.Arts, Soc.Studies, Physical fitness, Physical fitness, Science
 * Hobbies/Sports:** Tennis, Softball, Volleyball, Football, Golf
 * Pet Peeve:** When people ignore me, My brother, Missing your volleyball serve, Sea Food, some guy
 * Pets:** Buzz (Dog), Getting a puppy, Cosmo (Fish)
 * Siblings:** Younger brother, Older sister and brother, Older brother, Older brother, None
 * Other Things You Should Know About Us...**

Our Story (Draft)
__//**PROLOGUE**//__ "Found you!" Yelled Timothy while playing in the neighborhood. It was broad daylight, and Timothy was playing hide and seek with his friends. "Come out already!" "I can see you!" It was 1961, and a young boy named Timothy Guadapalli was standing next to a dark alleyway yelling for his friends to come out. He began to step in when he heard no voices replying. Suddenly, a dark, hooded figure emerged from the shadows- "Aaahhh!" Timothy let out a blood piercing scream, and that was the last ever heard of him. For 2 years, police searched for the missing boy. At the crime sight all they found was a note, saying JSN, scribbled in black pen. Eventually, everyone gave up and forgot about the mysterious kidnapping of Timothy Gaudapalli...

__//**Story**//__ "Wow, look at this!" Otto exclaimed. He and his sister were at their grandparents house looking through old boxes in the attic. "Look at this newspaper! Its from 1961!" Otto said. "The front headline says 'Boy Kidnapped. Never Found!' " "Let me see!" his sister Janie said. She started reading the newspaper article. "Boy kidnapped when playing in local neighborhood. Friends say that they heard him scream and when they came running to see what happened, Timothy had disappeared. The police looked for 2 years but they never found the boy. Later those years a total of 22 kidnappings happened. And those kidnapped children were never found." "Scary!" Otto said. Suddenly, a dark hooded figure came out of the shadows and snatched them away "Ahhh!" they both screamed.

When the police were searching at the crime sight, looking for evidence of the missing children, all they found was a crumpled note and on it, written in black ink, were the three letters, JSN.

JSN was a physcotic, muder crazed killer who had escaped from Alcatraz in search of the kids that got him sent to Alcatraz years before. He was never sent back to Alcatraz, and is still searching for the kids that got him sent to Alcatraz. .................................................. //__(To be continued)__//

HA-Shanon Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?