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Grade:7 Best Vacation:#1 Ireland #2Paris,France Birth Month:#1 November #2 July Career Goals:#1 Computer Troubleshooting #2 Lawyer Favorite Band(s):#1 No Favorite bands #2 Bon Jovi Favorite Candy:#1 M&M's #2 Lemonheads Favorite Food:#1 Bread #2 Potatoes Favorite Munchie:#1 Bread #2 Cheetos Favorite Soda:#1 Arizona Iced Tea #2 Ginger Ale Favorite Subject:#1 Science #2 Social Studies Hobbies/Sports:#1Fencing (sword fighting,) basketball #2 Video games, basketball, baseball, American football, soccer (football) Pet Peeve:#1People passing notes #2 Dogs barking Pets:#1 none #2 One dog (soft coated wheaten terrier) Siblings:#1 I have one brother #2 One brother one sister Other things you should know about me...#1 I like playing games #2 I love American football
 * 1) 1 is Michael and #2 is Ian

Here is our story.

Maximillian Starcrusher (or Max, as he liked to be called,) was 17 years and 244 days old when he gave birth to a new era in science. Around the galaxy this period was known as the robot era. The phenomenon of the Starcrushers intrigued scientists around the galaxy, so they started to create robots similar in looks and technology to the Starcrushers. Soon humans on the planet of Orinoco became too dependent on the Starcrushers and other versions of this robot. This all came during a period of great planetary tension, between the humans of Orinoco and the Crashon alien race. Max was appointed by the government to create a new and superior line of combat-oriented robots. These machines were to be used to defend the people of Orinoco from the attacks of the aggressive Crashons. These new Starcrushers were found to be effective on the battlefield, but the government began receiving reports of Starcrusher attacks on civilians. At first the government was skeptical that these reports were accurate, because they had a lead that the Crashons had scientists working to make a robot identical in appearance to their own Starcrushers, but were programmed to injure Orinocians. At last, the government realized that these were really Starcrushers when a squad of Starcrushers were identified and authenticated as real Starcrushers. This squad was caught trying to kill Maximillian Starcrusher. So after five more attempts on his life Max notified the government of two things; the first that the newest Starcrushers division was defective. The second was that he was leaving Orinoco until things calmed down with the Starcrushers. After Max left the Starcrushers began a revolution. After the revolt began, Orinocians began to leave and flee to more peaceful planets. After finding no more Orinocians the Starcrushers started attacking the Crashons. Ten years later, the war between the Starcrushers and the Crashons on Orinoco has escalated. Max returns with a few Orinocians who wish to restore peace to the planet they once loved. Max devised a plan to create peace between the Starcrushers and the Crashons. The plan was really an agreement or a treaty between the two parties which was agreed upon for a short time. In this time the Crashons began to think that they were somewhat shorthanded in the deal. The war continues and both sides try to recruit Maximillian and his fellow Orinocian scientists. Max analyzes both sides and decides that he wants to side with the aliens. Now the Starcrushers somewhat realize that they are at a disadvantage due to the fact that Maximillian has chosen the aliens over them. While Max is working with the aliens he gives them new armor and weapons for defense against the brutal Starcrushers. They are called the i9 fiber defense weapons and armor, i9s for short. After a well and carefully planned attack on Starcrusher headquarters the Crashons still lost the famed Battle of Orinoco. During that battle a few Starcrushers spies snuck into the Crashons’ main control center and captured and stole the few excess i9 units that were not being used. In a last ditch attempt to destroy the Starcrushers, the Crashons send everyone they have against the Starcrushers. Both parties suffer large losses in terms of personnel and equipment and move the fighting to another area. In the end, original residents of Orinoco return to live there in peace and harmony again. By: Ian Smith and Michael Oro

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) The plot is original.
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? it is definetly interesting but doesn't have enough tension.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I don't think the characters are life-like. but in this case i think that was better.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? not really. I couldn't imagine what was happening.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? Maybe they needed to improve the end. They could have made it longer if they needed to.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?