HA-Levi

Grade: 7 Best Vacation: New Zealand Birth Month: July Career Goals: Learn how to shear& become a carpenter. Favorite Band(s): Dont Really Have One Favorite Candy: Pretty much anything Favorite Food: Tacos Favorite Munchie: Chips Favorite Soda: Solo Favorite Subject: P.E. Hobbies/Sports: I Play Football Pet Peeve: When Some one back stabs you Pets: 2 dogs Siblings: 3 sisters 1 Brother Other things you should know about me...


 * MELBOURNE**

“Get off the road moron” “Why don’t you open your eyes sunshine” This was Melbourne one of the most road raged filled cities in Australia, cars going one way trams and buses heading for one another it was the devil's own spot. “WAKE UP and get ready to go to school” “IM UP for goodness sake” “Don’t start using that language Luke” Monday mornings were always our most stressful mornings out of the entire week. (School) Ding Dong Ding Dong. The bell for first period suddenly rings. “Ohhh we got humanities then chemistry first up” “Oh god my brains not even awake” says Jackson. Jackson was practically Lukes brother they’ve known each other since the very ripe age of 3. Recess “Punch him” “Break his nose” “Get into him” One of Lukes down sides is that he will snap easier than you can break a twig. This is what happened at a typical Melbourne school every day you can guarantee that there will be a fight. Maths was the last thing I needed at the end of the day. “There will be a pop quiz tomorrow so if you wish to pass I suggest you get home and start studying.” “We only live 2 blocks from school but still it was crazy trying to get home in one piece” “Hello how was your day” “Meh” When Luke was only 4 his dad died in a car accident and he’s never been the same towards his mother or really any one he hasn’t opened up ever since that day, but what really hurt him was that he died on Christmas Eve, he didn’t even open his presents till about a week after the accident.

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

I really don't think that you're story was good enought to live. It wasn't really a story at all and most of all it had no plot. I'm sorry to tell you that I Craig won't let your story live.