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DISASTER

One day my friends Fred and Luke went fishing on Fred’s boat it was the first time he had used it. It had a B.B.Q a cabin and a huge tank the tank was used for catching fish and then you put the fish in it. We were go to the pacific ocean to catch some sharks, some marlin(sword fish), snapper and maybe some cod we were going about 75km out to sea so you couldn’t see land we grabbed the anchor and threw the anchor into the dark blue choppy ocean it hit the bottom of the ocean and then we stopped moving. We started fishing for a hour or two we had no bites so we tried to pull the anchor up but it must have been stuck in a rock so lucky Fred had bought a swim suit. He put it on and got a snorkel and dived down into the ocean. He followed the chain that was connected to the anchor. He got to the bottom and he found out that the anchor was hooked onto an old ship wreck. He looked around and he saw a plank that said 1884 World War 1, Ship 7. Fred remembered that his dad said there was only one ship that wasn’t found and it was ship 7. Fred was so excited that he left the anchor and swam quickly up to the top of the sea. He yelled “I found it!” but no one was there. A shark was coming 3 metres in front of him and then 1 metre. Bang! He got eaten and torn up. No one saw Luke and the boat. Maybe it is another shipwreck? Two weeks later, they found Fred’s stiff head on the beach.

. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?