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Grade: 7 Best Vacation: Danny-I went on a cruise, Charlie-I went on a cruise, and John-went to Argentina Birth Month: Danny-August, Charlie-July, and John-December Career Goals: Danny-Basketball and skateboarder, John-soccer or musician or skateboarder, and Charlie-Aggressive in-line skating or Lawyer Favorite Band(s): Danny-Drop Dead, Gorgeous and TDWP, Charlie-Metallica and TDWP, and John-BFMV and almost every other screamo/metal band Favorite Candy:Danny- nerds, Charlie- Nerds, and John- Sour patch Kids Favorite Food: Danny- Meat loaf, Charlie- Eggplant Parmesan and garlic nots, and John- Cheese Steak Favorite Munchie: Danny, John, Charlie- Cookies Favorite Soda: Danny- Dr. Pepper, John- Root Beer, and Charlie- Dr. Pepper Favorite Subject: Danny, Charlie, John- Health Hobbies/Sports: Danny- Basketball, Baseball and skateboarding, John- Soccer, Skateboarding, Charlie- Skateboarding,aggressive in-line skating Sleeping, and play with pet Python (My Tie) Pet Peeve: Danny, John, Charlie- Posers Pets: Danny- Penguin, John- nothing, and Charlie- Python (My Tie) Siblings: Danny- none, Charlie- 2 Sister, John- Sister and 2 Brothers Other things you should know about me...

1st Draft- The Adventures of the 3 Amigops

Once upon a time there were three dudes Charlie, Danny, and John. They did everything together, they rocked out together, they skateboarded together and they hung out together. One day 360 kickflip to a nose manual to an impossible when John ran over to him. “What’s up John,” Charlie said. “Dude I just found out the most insane thing ever,” John said. “What?” Charlie inquired. “Danny…can FLY!!!” Exclaimed John. Charlie could not believe this so John took him to Danny. They found Danny at the skate park on the half pipe trying a rock to fackie. Danny stops and says, “Yo, what’s up, dudes?” Charlie says, “Dude, John said you can fly.” Danny answers, “Oh yea, check it out.” Right then Danny goes into a 720 flip airwalk. Charlie is left speechless. “Dude, where did you learn to fly?” John asked. Danny answered, “I found a stone with ancient writing on it that translated to ‘pick me up’.” “Where did you find the stone?” Charlie asked. Danny answered, “I found it in a cave that said ‘Danny come in’ and the cave was next to the hall of fame for skateboarders.” So, the three amigops head out for the cave. They skate for days crossing the nation. Soon they started seeing graffiti, skateboard pieces, and DC shoes and they knew they were getting close. They got through the clearing and find a glowing, solid gold, diamond studded quarterpipe. In the quarterpipe was a hole, which they found to be the cave. They enter the cave and realize they are not alone. There are three other skateboarders, Bam Margera, Bob Burnquist, and Rodney Mullen. “What are you guys doing here?” asked Rodney. “ Our friend Danny found a stone here and he was able to fly,” answered John. Bob said, “ You weren’t supposed to take that, give us the power back.” “ Dude no way, we challenge you to a skate off, if we win we get the powers, but if you win you guys can have the powers back,” Danny said. Bam agreed, “ Fine street 1st.” So this begins the contest, Charlie starts off with a nose manual, then heelflips to a darkside down a flight of stairs. Then to finish it off with a flamingo, to an anti-casper slide, to a casper, to a pogo. “ Pretty good,” says Mullen, “ but watch this.” Rodney does a kickflip to impossible, then to a lipslide but falls at the end. “ Oh man,” exclaims Rodney. So by default Charlie wins that match. Next Bam starts a manual to a nose manual to a boardslide, then to a ½ cab. Then John starts off with a primo flip to a hand plant, and then he does a nose slide to a tail slide to a nollie. So the judges Simon, Tony Hawk, and George Bush discuss and deem a tie. Next round is Danny vs. Bob. Bob ollie off a airplane 500 ft. in the air. Bob does a 720 flip and…. Lands it. Danny nollies off a jet 5000 ft. in the air he does a 360,000 flip and… lands in a handstand on his board. The obvious decision is… Danny WINS!! “Dude, you guys are amazing,” says Bam. “Thanks dude,” says John. In unison the amigops exclaim, “YAAHH TRICK!!” They grab the ancient stones and electricity runs through them. Charlie gains superspeed and John gains anti-gravity. Then, out of nowhere, Ed D jumps out and yells, “You just got PWNED!”

THE END By: Danny, John, Charlie, and Ed we pwn

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? nothing has to change its good how it is.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? the people in the story arn't life like because i dont think someone has superspeed but it doesnt have to be real

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

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