HA-Thomas

Hi my name is Tom. Best holiday: my best holiday was when i went to wet and wild in 2003
 * year**: im in year 7
 * Birth Month: January**
 * Career Goals:**
 * Favorite Band(s): anything**
 * Favorite lollie: chocolate**
 * Favorite Food: spaggetti bolanaze**
 * Favorite snack: cerial**
 * Favorite soft drink: coca-cola zero**
 * Favorite Subject: cooking and P.E**
 * Hobbies/Sports: motorbike riding, football**
 * Pets: i have one dog. he is a male, he is a border collie.**
 * Siblings: i have 3 brothers, mikey is the oldest, he is 14,Â then me im 12,Â jimÂ is 10Â and sam isÂ 6Â and he isÂ the youngest**

**Fishing Trip**
One day Dad and I went fishing in the Murray River and we caught 3 fish. Dad and I always went fishing together. The fish we caught were cod. One cod was 38cm and the other two were just over 30cm. To weeks later dad and I went overseas to Canada. We were catching fish 75cm long and weighing 2kg. One day when we were in Canada we went on a fishing cruise and you were allowed to take home what ever fish you caught. When the cruise ship anchored dad cast out his rod and caught a 40cm snapper. When we got back to shore Dad had a bucket load of snapper that were all over 30cm. When Dad and I were walking to the pub we saw a friend of mine and his name was Nathan. He lived back in Warrnambool near my house. Later that day Nathan came to the Motel and we played footy for a bit. When Nathan and I were coming inside a few kids came out and said they could beat us. When we started I grabbed the ball and thumped it to Nathan. Nathan got caught behind but Nathan leaped, took the best mark I have ever seen. The next day Nathan and I went home on the same plane with our parents.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?