darf

Grade:7! Best Vacation:Well..Ohh....Thats a toughie!Any i guess! XD Birth Month:A Coranor of corse! (Thumbs up)!! Favorite Band(s):Umm....Anything....As long as its not country Favorite Candy:Popeyes! Favorite Food:Sandmiches(Sandwhiches)!!! Favorite Munchie:Every Kids Favorite...CHIPS!!! Favorite Soda:Ewww!SODA!!!???? Favorite Subject:Math,Writing,Reading,Science,Social Studies,Health,Arts Ed.....,Pretty much everything BUT Gym! Hobbies/Sports:As long as i'm with a friend...everything is fun...Especialy new things(Sky diving)! ;) Pet Peeve:Burping and People who chew with there mouth open Mang!!!! Xd Siblings:(*Sigh*) One Sister and Two Brothers(Technically only One brother but he didn't die)! Other things you should know about me...Umm....Theres alot and yet theres nothing....for one thing i'm in love with Rainbows....My real names not darf....I LOVE school very much... <3! I Read A LOT! I have way more energy then i should...I LOVE GETTING SCARED!!!!!

//It's a dragon Story! // It was very hot that day,the air was humid and and even though i was only lived 5 minutes from the school... it still felt like a death sentence walking back from school when it was this hot outside.It made it even worse that i was furoius with my best friend,she ditched me for the person i hated most in my life,My enemy,My sister.When i get this mad i get hot too so it didn't help that it was almost summer so that made it hotter which made me hotter.As i turned onto my street the sun went behind the clouds and a cool breeze came and blew in my face and made my hair fly behind my face.perfect i muttered to myself sarcastically....it felt good but now i was almost home and now it gets cooler?!I was three houses away from my house and i saw something blue glint in the light of the sun as the sun began to shine.I was to lazy and to hot to go see what it was and i just didn't care.

It was almost time for supper and we were out of milk so my mom asked me to go to the store...I was thinking of saying no but it was a bit cooler outside and the sun was gone...it was dark.Still i wanted to say no but when i saw my sister though the big window coming up with my Best friend i surpressed a sigh Yeah i guess i'll go, i grabed the money ad ran outside.

When i got outside it was windier then i thought it was.I was running the oppesite way th wind was coming and it was blowing in my face.I couldn't see anything but i know this neiborhood off by heart.Close to the corner of the bock i thought i should cross someones grass to get to the store faster so i started to turn and tripped over something and fell on my right shoulder.I skited on the ground for about two seconds.I turned and layed on on my back and i let my head rest on the ground .I pulled up my sleeve on my T-shirt to look at my shoulder.It looked like i fell on a cheese grater,the skin was pulled back and i could see blood spouling out of the wound.It stung and i looked away in horror.It didn't mind the sight of blood,but just looking at it made it hurt more.As i turned my head to looked the other way something blue caught the last glimps of the sun go down and shine in my eyes. I looked closer and saw a blue glass sort of looking thing.I picked it up to examine it.It was shaped like a square with soft edges,It was dark blue with a shimmer of green and rd.It's texture was bumping like the top of a nail or a ...scale!It was to big to be a lizzard scale...it was almost bigger then my hand.There was only one thing i could think of...a dragon scale!''A dragon scale I whispered under my breathe...i noticed i talked a lot to myself.The wind picked up an my hair flung around my face...all i could see was the intense red of my hair.It got so windy my eyes burned against the wind and i shut my eyes and waited for the wind to die down so i could get up and keep walking to the store....I bet myself that I wouldn't be able to even walk against the wind it was so strong.The wind cut out a sudden stop and the air was no longer hot and humid...it was cool and fresh...it was chilly and gave me goose bumps.The ground was felt softer the i remembered...why couldn't it have felt that soft when I fell?!I slowly opened my eyes afraid of what i might see.I let out a quick gasp when my eyes were fully open.

I was on a forest floor,trees towered over ,my head,it would have made it feel suffocating how they made a roof over me but they were to high up to feel any sort of suffocation.Roots came out of the ground and made the terrian uneven and wrapped around other roots that sprung up from the soft forest floor.The trees had no leaves on them so i could see the clear night sky through the thick bunch of twigs on the trees.It was very foggy,scary,and oddly relaxing.The air was open and easy to breath...like it might be autum...here though,it might be autum,where ever here was.That took me out of my train of thoughts and i relized i had no idea where i was...how i was just sitting in an unknown place of darkness and night....a place that might even be dangorous...That thought made me jump to feet to find...What was i hoping to find...a village,city,or just someone who could help me out.I relized once i was standing i was still holding the scale in my hand and was light headed.I put my arms out to keep my balance.When i got my balance back i went ot take a step forward hot breathe tickled down my neck and my mucsle tightened in a instent.

I took a deep breathe and exhaled slowly.I lifted the scale to use as a mirror,to see what was behind me,i was petrafide,afraid to make a large movement such as turning around.I had to adjust the scale the scale to find the face of who...or what was behind me...i passes something standing out from the darkness.i went back to see what it was.The first thing i saw were its teeth bright,clean,and sharp.It looked like he had fangs all the way to the back of his throat.His nose looked deformed....he didn't even have a nose,just two little holes!I looked up to see his eyes....bright,fearice,and bloodshot and waiting for my to turn around and rip throat from my body!He made a movement and i looked back into the scale and i could tell in that instent moment he knew i was looking at him as he looked deeply into my eyes...Waiting for something.

 I didn't know what to do...i could run but then he would for sure catch me but if i stood there how long would i stand there or would he finally just jump on me?I had to make a choice fast!Automatically i just started walking as if no one was behind me,i was shaking and i knew that he knew i was walking behind him...why wasn't he doing anything though?Out of the corner of my eye something else moved in the trees...for some reason this made me jump up and turn around,which was a bad idea since i knew the...person/thing was still behind me.I was looking him right in the face,I saw another figure emerging from the trees behind the...person.I wonder if he was aware of the other figure behind him...I hope at least one of them is good but what if there working together i thought.All these thought flew through my head in all of 3 seconds.The person/thing standing in front of me bared his teeth and shot forward pushing me back against the soft cold ground.

We hit the ground hard,with rocks digging into my back.He leaped up from the ground and we went sailing through the clear night sky.I thought maybe he was just flying but then i relized he was just jumping far and high into the air.He was holding me under hid arm,tightly,careful to not drop me.He looked back which made me curious as to what he was looking at.I looked back and the dark figure was behind us and relized we were being chased and for some odd reason the person carrying me didn't just leave me back there unless i was food and they were fighting for food.He leaped up and kicked his foot of a tree and sent us flying into a different direction.He did he same thing and sent us off in a different direction and we were headed right for the dark figure chasing us.

<span style="color: rgb(209, 202, 21)">His foot shot out in front of us and the figures body went soaring back.He flew back so fast i wouldn't have known he hit the tree if he didn't shake the tree so violently with his body.He landed to the ground with a loud thud.He didn't move and we were of leaping through the sky again.The only wind i could feel was from the amount of speed we were leaping at ,pouncing from tree to tree....it felt like flying but we had to go to the ground a couple of times so that gave away that we weren't flying.I finally got so curious as to what we were doing just jumping from tree to tree,i was still scared and afraid of what he had planed i just simply asked him what we were doing, What are we doing and where are we going? You gave me a look like he didn't know i could talk then his looked turned to confusion,"Ah i really don't,Er know where we're going to tell you truth.I think we could go to the town up a couple miles? So your not going to eat me? He gave me a look and burst out laughing,it wasn't a laugh of evil but as if i told a funny joke.NO!Why in the world would i do that...you probably don't even taste that good.I guess we'll go to the town up here...it is my town anyways,I'm starving,we'll get some food when we get up there? Ah sure...yeah i guess.''I wasn't really hungry but if he was...but what if he was going to eat me and was just to playing it up that he wasn't?

<span style="color: rgb(14, 255, 0)">We got to the town that was miles away in five mintues!He set me on ground and we began walking along the muddy road.It tooks us while to get where we were going,the roads curved every which way you went.We walked into a little house and were greeted by a larger women,Finally your home...and who is this with you?She looked at me with praised eyes.You can have a set dear,over at the table.I walked over to the table like she told me to and sat down.She grabed...I didn't even know his name yet!Well she grabed him and started wispering...I could bearly hear them but i made some of the things they were saying,Shes so normal...where did you find her? ''In the woods...why do you ask? Do you like her...she seems to be a very nice girl. He groaned and saidMom!It's not like that i just met her!I know what they talking about then. Well go sit down for dinner then...your brothers and your sister will be home shortly.

<span style="color: rgb(0, 219, 255)"> The swung open with a loud thud and four tall figures step in.They sat down at the table as if they were angry. Today was the longest day ever!One shouted,i'm sure it was s girl I heard someone wisper in my ear,Come on lets go!'' I looked beind me and it was...him,The persons name i didn't know.We got up and left his house. Your human right?He asked in a qiute voice. Yes.Why?Aren't you human?I asked getting a little bit frightened. ''No!Humans aren't allowed here!you could get killed! I stared at him asif i hadn't heard him.So i could get killed for coming here but not on my own free will? Where did you come from? I just kept staring at him. Well we hve to get you back from where you came...back in the forest,but that was...His voice trailed off and he stared into space his voice was soon apruptHurry we have t get there before midnight! Then we were off running through the little town.

<span style="color: rgb(207, 10, 219)">We reached the edge of the forest and he set me on my feet. Okay so you will go back the way you came okay? I don't know if i can or how!? I could tell my voice was shaky and i knew i was scard.We started slowly walking through the forest slowly as if someone was watching us and if we ran we'd get killed.He looked around llike there monsters and poeple coming at us in every direction. We need to hurry before they see us,its after midnight.

**Starting May 1st (2008):** ms cree 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? i think you could add a coulpe of more surprises

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? i thoght the charitars were very intersting my fav was the dragon

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">see // and //<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">hear // and //<span style="font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'">experience // the story? yes they do you done a great job

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? the similes

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?

yes, because it was a good story and she was a good story-teller.

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

it was a good story but one thing i would change to read better would be to use a different color for the writing.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.

yes, but i would use a different color like black or the purple.

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