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Grade:7 Best Vacation:ontairio Birth Month:august Career Goals:to do good in school Favorite Band(s):nickleback Favorite Candy:gum Favorite Food:pizza Favorite Munchie;chips Favorite Soda:7 up,sprite, pepsi Favorite Subject:art Hobbies/Sports:soccer,baseball Pet Peeve: my brothers Pets:dog,bird Siblings:3 brothers Other things you should know about me..I like to watch t.v. and go on to my computer. and I like to go hang out with all my friends.

One stormy night I was watching some T.V. and then I saw a light. I went to go see what it was and then something grabbed me. When I woke up I was not at my house. I was in an alien space ship and when I finally got to my feet two big things grabbed me and were dragging me to their king.

The king told me to tell him a good story or he would kill me and blow up the earth and every one in it, so I told him about the time earth had its first contact with aliens. This is how it went. One sunny day something amazing happened. Something crashed into earth, it looked like an space ship. It looked like an alien space ship.

It crashed into my back yard. I was so surprised that a space ship crashed into my back yard, I almost fainted. Then I closed my eyes to see if my eyes were playing tricks on me because it was hot that day and I was tired. I opened my eyes and it was still there. Then someone came out of the ship it looked like a girl, an alien girl. So I closed my eyes again and she was gone. Then I turned around and there she was she can go as faced as me closing and opening my eyes in one second. then my dad was coming so I pushed her up stairs and into my room.

Then she started to eat my makeup! So I told her to stop and she stopped and my dog came into my room and started to bark! She pulled out a gun! SHE WAS GOING TO SHOOT MY DOG! I pushed the gun out of the way so she would not kill my dog.

I told her that dogs are good. She was the most weird thing ever. she had two blue eyes, blond hair, 4, 2 legs and her skin was green and it felt like rubber and plastic at the same time. She was so cold. She said that she was from the Planet Pluto and that she was sent here by her father to see our planet. Then she told me her name. It was Flower but when she talks it a blur gust enough to understand the words that she was saying. so she wanted to go out side and I told her it was a bad idea to go out side then I blinked and she was out side so I ran after her we were out side for a walk and every one was running and hiding from us. and the next thing I know is that I'm blind folded and flower was gone. someone unblind folded me and started asking me some questions but I would not answer until I could see flower and when they showed me flower and she was all tide up and as I can see they were hurting her then i grabbed anything I could and as I did not no it was a smoke bomb so I throw it and untied flower and we ran for it.

and we ran out of the city so we could not be could it been a day and they had all of the police after flower and me. I was so scared then they found us and took us to the city my family was so scared for me. and i had all the news people were asking me a lot of questions and I asked for a microphone and then I told them how bad this was to flower and me then i said you would not like it if they did that to you then they all put down their weapons and let us go then we went back to the house and my family helped us fixed her space ship so she can go home.

and I told her that she can come back any time she wants to. and thats how my story went I told the king he was not impressed with my story and he said kill her and destroy there earth and then I was screaming and his daughter came out and I said flower and she said father let her go shes my friend she saved me so let her go.and then the king said ok we will let her go but next time tell me a better story. and the king said I will not blow up your earth but next time I want a better story from you.

ok I said. I will take you back home said the king. and as I no I was in my bed and I was at home again. I woke up and I thought it was all a dream but then I saw it it was a note from the aliens and it said good bye for now.

SMS Group 10

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) It is Interesting to me. The plot was very interesting. You showed a lot of creativity 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think the story was fine the way it is.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? no their not life like,

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Shiloh HA . Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? Yes it was interesting.

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. I think this was an interesting story

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. no

