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Parents Night Out

One night my friends Storm,Tomee,Raistlin and Wyatt were over and my mom&dad and baby brother were out. We had a sleep over.we watched bad boys II the matrix and Room1408.right after that the lights went out and every body freaked!we heard a tap on the window but it was a treebranch.then we heard a knock at the door.we were too scared to go.the knock got louder.wyatt told me to go check but I didn't want togo .the phone rang,I jumped,knowing it was my mom Iran to anser it. she toldme she was on her way home.so I went to the window peeking out I saw a hookhanded man walking downthe alley.Mom&Dad pulled up.we were safe.

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Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? No, there was not enough detail and no a great plot. 2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. It was alright and could of been much better. 3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. No, I would not.