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Grade: 7 Best Vacation: Going to Miami, Florida, USA, Going down the shore for two weeks in Toms River. Birth Month: March, January Career Goals: Favorite Band(s): Avenged Sevenfold, Eminem, Atreyu, 50 Cent. Favorite Candy: Hershey Chocolate, Reese's Fast Break Favorite Food: Chinese food, Burger and fries. Favorite Munchie: Doritos, Lays Favorite Soda: Coca-Cola, Sierra Mist Favorite Subject: Social Studies, Pre-Algebra Hobbies/Sports: Person 1 likes soccer, basketball, baseball, and football. Person 2 likes basketball, football, soccer, and track. Pet Peeve: Person hates it when people make fun of short people. Person 2 hates it when people think they're cool but they're not. Pets: Person 2 has a Chocolate Labrador. Siblings: Person 1 has two little sister. Person two has a little brother. Other things you should know about me... person 1 and 2 scored over 40 points in our basketball season, person 1 is in a football competition the winner gets bragging rights all year **LONG**, but it is a tie so far.

This is a story we wrote. Person 1 is Andy and Person 2 is Mike.

The year is 2382. Two brothers, age 21 and 22, are sent to Mexico to help the Mexican Army fight against terrorists and rebels that are trying to overthrow the Mexican president. Their mother is very sad, for she thinks they will die. If only she knew.

The brothers were very close. Their names were Andy and Mike. Mike was more mature than Andy. Andy was more aggressive and did reckless things, which made Mike really mad. They were sent to Area 221 for training (a.k.a. the Amazon Wasteland).

They underwent vigorous training, from 20 K runs, to rifle shooting. Both passed with flying colors, but had completely different views on fighting. Mike was better with rifles and firearms. Andy was better with hand-to-hand combat and was better with knives than guns. After they finished their training, they were shipped of to Mexico to fight in the war. When the trip was over, they sleepily walked to their bunks and fell asleep.

That night, they were sleeping peacefully, when an alarm went off. Dressing quickly and grabbing their weapons, they ran to headquarters. They asked the head general what the heck was happening. He frantically replied that the Mexican president had been kidnapped by the rebels. The general said that it was a complete surprise and that the president was in great danger. He entrusted the brothers with special force field armor, night vision goggles, and stealth ops uniforms. They quickly changed and rushed off to battle.

The recon mission was very successful with Andy and Mike. They recovered the president and silently took out all of the rebels and terrorists in that whole camp. The terrorists didn’t know what had hit them until it was way to late. Unfortunately, three terrorists got away, but on the bright side, Mike and Andy captured four terrorists for interrogation.

The brothers were awarded with medals of bravery for their actions and became personal friends with the Mexican president. When they came home to America for Christmas, they were hailed as war heroes.

The year is now 2384. It has been two years since Mike and Andy have come home since Christmas in 2382. Mike and Andy had been fighting everywhere, from fighting and escaping the terrorist underwater base in the Yucatan Peninsula, to fighting off rebels in Mexico City. Mike had been promoted to Staff Sergeant, which is a position where the person trains recruits for the Marines. Andy was a General, who is a person who commands troops in battle.

One fateful battle, the brothers were fighting well-trained terrorists in Puebla, Mexico. Mike was almost killed by snipers on the buildings, but Andy saved him by drawing their fire, then having his snipers take the terrorist snipers on the buildings. Andy was awarded a Purple Heart, which is a high honor medal. Mike soon recovered and went on to fight with renewed vigor. The current year is 2385. The war has been going on for three years now. Andy is a Lieutenant General, which is a very high rank. Mike is a Lieutenant Colonel, which is the highest ranking in the Marines. The brothers are sent to the biggest confrontation to end everything. The battle becomes very heated, and Mike starts to retreat, but Andy, being his idiotic little self, runs off to keep on fighting. To top it all off, a sandstorm came out of nowhere and Mike couldn’t chase after him. The battle ends, and Mike goes to search for Andy. It has been three days since he had seen his brother. He fears for his brother’s life. One day later, Mike finds Andy face down on the remains of the battlefield. At first, he thinks he is sleeping, but to a shock, Mike checks his pulse, but there is none. He falls to his knees and cries. Out of pity, Mike carries his brother’s body back to base. There, he is give a proper burial. Then and there, he swears vengeance and to end this war.

joshuah-bel-HA. nice story, i really like it. what gave you that idea. bye.

0kiwifruit0 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) I think your plot is really creative and interesting because it took place in Mexico and ends with a sad but good end ending. I liked how it took place in the 2300 's! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think the main Characters were Mike and Andy and they went throw some difficult situations and hard times.
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3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? I could know a little more about your characters but other then that this is a great story.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? I think I can experience the story without having to hear it. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Joshuah - HA 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?