hawaiiangirl

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=__WOW ALIENS__=

by:Hawaiiangirl
CRASH, BANG, BOOM ................. I heard a loud noise I look out side it was a black and purple space ship.I said "WOW ALIENS" I was amazed. My friends were there and they stared screaming and left I kept staring at them though the window.

A black light flashed out of their space ship as this little tiny red thing walked out of the ship it had chicken legs and five eyes three were atenas. He kept saying "WAZAP" oh yeah the space ship had legs too oh and the aliens kept sticking out there touges out.The next day the public found out.I went to school and no one was their because everyone was scared to live their house becousethe night before aliens were ruing around town like their were crazy or somthing and the were recking every thing ecsept for the schools that was they only thing kids wanted them to ruin.The people the city were blaming me.

I found it so amazing that aliens came to earth and it was so cool that aliens picked my front to land on.I am still amazed that aliens are real.

smsgroup01 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) A)I think that this story was very good and exciting. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?A)I found this story very good it had good problems very interesting and yeah...
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3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?A)Umm i found the characterization were very well put. They desicbed there selfs very well.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? A) I think they could of made the story a little longer but it was very well put!

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) A)I think that this story was very good and exciting. 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?A)I found this story very good it had good problems very interesting and yeah...

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?A)Umm i found the characterization were very well put. They desicbed there selfs very well.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? A) I think they could of made the story a little longer but it was very well put!

HA-Belinda hi this is a great story,just a few tips that i tought would be useful :) 1- when you said in your story -i said "WOW ALIENS' i was amazed. instead you could put-"WOW ALIENS" i said Amazed 2- don't forget you're puntuation(like comas) i wouldn't want aliens in my backyard:(

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not?

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.