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LMS GROUP 9
1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

Yes, your plot was very original and creative. It caught our attention very much with your awesome sense of humor, and your spunk.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

The problem that the character faced with the knife was very unexpected, but you could have added a little more detail to the suspense and tension of the plot.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, and discussion from other characters, the characters own actions?

The characters are not very life-like, because they don’t exactly have real emotions besides crying. There wasn’t any dialogue between the characters, although the description did make much sense.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story?

Well, the imagery was pretty good; the detail was something in your funny story, which could use a little more work.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Some areas that need improvement are the parts that needed more dialogue, and action. You could have also added a little more detail. Otherwise, we think you did a great job!

Rachel
1.Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

Yes I think that the plot was very original.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

I agree. I think that there was not enough tension in this story but the problem was definatly a surprise. Maybe you should have described it a little more to make it more life like.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

You didn't really describe the characters. They didn't really seem life like eaither. Maybe you should try to also use dialogue.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

Well I couldn't really picture it in my mind. The only thing that I could see in my head that was clear was the hill.

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? The imagery and the dialogue would be where you would need the most improvement. Keep up the good work!!!