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If Tiktala Was A Polar Bear
"What would you like to carve?" Said the Spirit." The polar Bear " said Tiktala. Tiktala was sent to were she had to were she had to go to meet the Polar bear. The Polar Bear's name was tulimak and she helped Tiktala hunt, swim, and do other polar bear things. One day when Tulimak and Tiktala were hunting they came across a sleeping seal but by the time the seal up it was too late. After killing the seal Tiktala felt sad so after she returned to her normal self and got home. She decided that she would carve polar bears and seals. As Tiktala grew older she became famous for her carvings If she had kids she would tell them the story about how she became a Polar Bear and learned about them. She would also tell them about when she got back home she was able to carve really great Polar Bear carvings.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

I didn't like it, but some people at my school would. And i didn't really get the plot that much.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

I would change the start and say somthing about the main charaters. And I wouldn't start with speaking marks.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

I don't think the charaters m,ve that much, as this could happen in the sme place. It didn't telll what the history or what happened though the story.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

No

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

It needs some adjectives and that sort of story shold be a lot longer.

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? I would allow the story tell to live another day. i think this because she wanted to carve seals and polar bears.

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. the story was good. I think that it should have been a little more detailed and a little more longer.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. Yes