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Right Arm

On October Friday the 13th Jordan,Jesse,Tomee and Raistlin were watching When a Staranger Calls......The door gets knocked on Raistlin answer`s it nobody is there. Jesse yells, "While you`re up get me some chips." He replies, "Ok." Five minutes pass, Ten minutes pass Fifteen minutes,pass 30 minutes pass, fineally Tomee goes looking for him.He look`s in the closet there he is arrowed threw the eye sockets and chips in his left hand.......He`s MISSING his right arm! Tomee yells "holy manifitoin". Jordan and Jesse coming running they cant find Tomee. they look and look but they cant find him.They do some researched on the house address 666 devil lane,there was a man found with no right arm he swore to come back in a hundred years and reclaim his arm. Jesse says to Jordan "I am going to the shed to get some hockey sticks as protection" Thirty minutes pass again, Jordan looks out the window there he see`s Jesse armless.Jordan is hiding in the closet the spirit found him Jordan says "Who or what are you? The Spirit says I am the polterguist Johnathon Hoch. Hoch ripped of Jordans arm and started the house on fire.And thats how the story dosent end............And Jordan was still alive he grabbed a cross and said in the name of God go back where you came from once again in the name of God go back where you came from. Hoch laughed "ha ha" In a non-fearful laugh.But Jordan was dieing what was he to do?He said it one more time in the name of GOD go back where you came from Hoch started to vanish then someone said "wake up Jordan wake up it`s time for school"he woke up. His mom said "are you ok?" "come on lets get going.The end.

sms group 8 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) It was very interesting and creative.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There is much tension in the story and I enjoyed it but I felt there could be more detail added to add more suspense in the climax. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Yes, the characters were life like. 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? There was not enough detail which made it not as good as it could be. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? The climax could be longer after the climax you went right to the end it could use more detail.

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? Yes it was creative.

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. i liked it.

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.no