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Becca 1 Kelsey 2 Grade:Both in 7th Best Vacation:1) California (2) Florida Birth Month:1) September (2) January Career Goals:1) I want to work at the united nations (2) I want to be an actress Favorite Band(s):1) Hellogoodbye, The shins, the lucksmiths, the format, eisley&& a lot more (2) JONAS BROTHERS! Favorite Candy:1)sour gummy worms (2) all candy Favorite Food:1) salad (2)sushi Favorite Munchie:1) popcorn (2) chips Favorite Soda:1) Ginger ale (2) coca-cola Favorite Subject:1)Spainish (2) Social Studies Hobbies/Sports:1) Soccer, swimming, and tennis (2) Cheering, bowling, softball, and volleyball Pet Peeve:1) when people don't use proper grammar (2) feet Pets:1) My doggie lilly (2) I have 3 dogs tucker, beamer, and smush. 4 fish Siblings:1) My sister Erica (2) My brother kyle Other things you should know about me...1) i'm pretty rad :P (2) Im pretty amazing :) oh and me and becca are bestfriends

STORY TIME-

“Princess Polar Bear” by Kelsey and Becca

Once upon a time there was a beautiful polar bear named Angela, Angela wasn’t just a polar bear, she was a princess. She lived with the king and queen (her parents) in a beautiful igloo palace on an ice burg. Angela had a wonderful life, every day she was treated like a princess (maybe because she was one) All she did every day was swim in the ocean and drank unlimited coca-cola, she was living a life that any other polar bear would die for. But Angela wanted to be human; she had seen them around and was always fascinated by them. The way they walked and talked amazed her. Then one day, giant unbeatable magic rats invaded the palace, they outnumbered all of the palace guards and attacked. They kidnapped the princess and took her to an underground lair where they used their magical powers to transform her into a human. Within hours the princess woke up on a bed in a totally different world. She woke up with a new body, one she had never seen before. Angela had smooth hairless arms and legs, which she was not used to because two days ago she was a polar bear with a warm coat of fur. After a few days in the hospital Angela was released. She wound up in New York City. She spent the next few days in New York City living the life of a star. She ate dinner at five star restaurants, and shopped at stores only celebrities would think of shopping at. After living the “Good life” she decided to take a trip to the spa where she was primped and pampered. When she went back to her luxurious suite she was very surprised to see one of the evil magic rats sitting on her bed. He told her she had a choice, she could either stay in New York with all the money she could ask for, but never see her parents again, or go back to being a polar bear and living with her family. Although she wanted to stay human and live a perfect life, she decided that being with her family was the best choice. When she told the rat for some reason he was laughing and he said,” Fine it is your choice.” The next day Angela woke up in the North Pole and she was near the palace gates but when she tried to open them she couldn’t because she was still a human. The rat had tricked her into returning home a human. She knew what would happen to her if she tried to go into the palace, she would be killed. So Angela snuck into the palace at night and tried to gather all of her stuff. While she was rummaging through her belongings she came across magic wish card she had got for her 16th birthday that she had never used. Angela ripped open the wish card and wished that she would return to being a polar bear and the next thing she knew Angela was back to being her old self. The next day when her parents saw her they were so happy that she had returned. She told them all about her adventures in New York and how the evil rat tricked her. Her parents were so glad that she was home and they threw a coming home party. Being home was great and even though she knew she missed out on a fabulous life in the city she was so happy to be home.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) **I think the plot is really intresting, creative and original**
 * HA Georgia**

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? **I think the characters are really good**

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? **I think the characters were really enjoyable**

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? **Yes**

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? **The Middle**

HA Tzigane . Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)**I think that the plot is imaginative, creative and really good**

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?**The characters are likable and good.**

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?**I think that the characters are really good.**

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?**Yes.**

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?**Maybe adjectives, describing words.**