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The Buffalo Hunt

One sunny day Angelique went to find buffalo chips.Joesph went looking for her.He couldn't find her.He ran home to tell maman.They all went looking for her no one found her.The next day there was a new boy to the tribe.His name was Fred Bobby Jim.Secretly it was angeliqu in discise.Only me the horse new that.The next day Fred Bobby Jim went buffalo hunting.It was so tireing.It was so tiring that she told everyone that it was her.Maman asked why she did that?She said "cause boy always have all the fun but the do alot of work too".The next day we went buffalo hunting,And we caught alot.Later we had a pow-wow and a feast.It was so much fun.The next day we had to move to find a new place to live Everything that I carried was so hevy.

SMS Group #14

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) Yes, the plot is original.

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? There was a lot of suspense. I* enjoyed the whole story!

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? The characters are likable

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story? Yes, i can picture the story in my head

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? None, it was PERFECT!

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? No, I would not let the storyteller live another day because the story was not well written in my opinion.

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. This story was not good because I didn't understand what the writer was saying and it should have had a better begining

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories. No.