sms0708-7th-06



Sergio Grade:7 Best Vacation: portugal Birth Month:may Career Goals:graphic designer Favorite Band(s): too many Favorite Candy: sweet tarts Favorite Food: pizza Favorite Munchie: chips Favorite Soda: iced tea Favorite Subject: social studies Hobbies/Sports: soccer Pet Peeve: I don't Know Pets:bird Siblings: sister Other things you should know about me...? ?

The Adventures Mark Rider On a summer day a boy sat on a hill on in L.A. His name is Mark Rider. He is fourteen. He had no idea he was to have one of the greatest adventures ever. He was a good kid he hang out with the cool kids. He liked to read, was good at sports, especially soccer. His biggest problem he ever had was a midterm. He had no idea his world was about to be to be sent upside down. He was playing soccer in the big field behind his school. When he saw a guy in the stands. It was Elvis. He and Elvis made eye contact and someone on the other team ran past him an scored on the goalie. He cursed to himself and looked back at the stands and he was gone. He lost the game four to two because he was thinking about that. He went home to find that there were cop cars everywhere around his house. There were cops everywhere, running for here to there. He ran inside his house to seen that his live in babysitter or teensiter was crying her eyes out. He ran up to here and asked what happened. “Your uncle is dead,” she said between sobs. Mark was shocked. Mark has lived with his uncle all his life. He was told that his parents died in a car accident. He was about to scream. How could this have happened? Something popped into his mind. Now he could go in to the office. His uncle has all ways kept is office locked, even when he was inside. How could you think of that now Mark thought. Alex was sleeping one night and he was having a great dream of his uncle. He woke but didn’t know why. It was eleven forty-five. His eyes adjusted and he saw an amazing sight. He say his uncle. He was standing by the window. “Your alive,” mark said. “No I am not,” his uncle said. “But…..” “You are seeing me but others can’t, you have special powers you were given them because we think you are the most worthy of them,” his uncle said. “I ..uhh..,” mark said. He had so many question he was speech less. “Tomorrow you will start a grand adventure with your powers, there will be a car waiting for you in the morning” his uncles said. Mark was going crazy he will go back to sleep and this will be over in the morning. And he did, but what happened that night was no dream. The next morning he woke up did everything he did in the morning trying not to think of his “dream”. He ate breakfast and walk out the door a black car was parked in front off his home. He saw it and the back door opened. He walked to it he had no idea what to do. He remembered what his uncle said on day when he talked to him about his girl problems. “If you don’t take the change you will all ways wonder what could have been,” his uncle said. Mark to the chance he duct into the car and closed the door. The window between him and the driven slid down. “Good morning Mr. Rider what music would you like to hear,” the driver said. The car started to drive away. Mark rider was on his “great adventure”.

TO BE CONTINUED By: Sergio Amaral

Starting May 1st (2008): gangstadaddy 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you see and hear and experience the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Chloe HA 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?