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Hi this is Ryan Grade:7th grade Best Vacation: every year going to outer banks Birth Month: July Career Goals: to become a sucessful lawyer Favorite Band(s):Bon Jovi, Green Day, Nickleback Favorite Candy:snickers Favorite Food:pizza Favorite Munchie:chezits Favorite Soda: Pepsi Favorite Subject:math Hobbies/Sports:basketball, golf, Boy scouts Pet Peeve:I hate when people chew gum with there mouth open Pets:none Siblings: I have a younger brother and sister Other things you should know about me... I love the out doors camping, hiking, fishing kyacking, boating, archery anything else in the out doors

Ryan McGann February 26, 2008 St. Michael School 7A

Boy of the Woods

Once upon a time a boy live deep in the North American woods. He had a great love for baseball. He was not able to play the game he loved because he was the only person in a 100 miles at least that is what he thought. Yet he was a strong boy he spent along time each day running and chopping down trees and carrying the wood around. He also loved to make things out of wood like baseball bats and canoes he made his own canoe and also used it go on the river. He has been thinking of trying to get out of the woods for along time and he finally decided to get out and start a life in a big city and try to play baseball. One day he decided to leave he packed up his tools and started out on his canoe up the river. For days and days he canoed until he saw something. It was the end of the river and there was another man there he looked like he was holding something he had no idea what it could be as he got closer he had to leave the canoe behind it was to heavy to carry. As he got closer the man was holding a baseball bat. He asked the man where he was and the man had no response although he said baseball the boy said baseball back and the man smiled and started to walk the young boy followed him to a beautiful baseball field it was so beautiful he asked to take a swing the boy hit a fare ball up left field the man was impressed. The man was actually the baseball coach there and asked if he wanted to play a game with them the boy was amazed he never played with other children before. It would take him time to decide. He said he would play one game before making his final decision. So the man was happy and let him stay in the field house on the right field line. That is where they keep all of the equipment. The boy also was allowed to use the weight room so he could exercise instead of chopping down trees and lifting wood. He had his first practice he was extremely shy with the other kids. They got to know him because the night of the game all the kids stayed over in the field house this helped the young boy to meet the team. At the end of the first game they one thanks to the boy’s home run. All of the players really wanted the boy to stay. But the young boy kept hiking. Four days he realized he was getting older and if he wanted to play baseball he would have to start soon. He reached the big city on New York he has never seen so many people he thought there were a lot of people at his first game but if he was going to play pro he would have to get used to it. He decides he would try out for the New York Mets baseball team. He waited anxiously for a few days to hear the results. A few days later he received an envelope in the mail from the Mets. It was saying he is a great baseball player but they don’t need him but it said they needed a bat maker he felt qualified for the job he opened up a little shop next to the Mets stadium. He spent years making bats for them. Until he felt the urge to be closer to the game of baseball and he heard that an announcer was needed for the team and applied for the job. He had a lot of knowledge with the game he thought he would make it. He received an envelope a lot like the last one but this time it said we would like for you to be assistant announcer for us and he accepted the job he bought s little apartment in New York City and everyday traveled out to the stadium and announced everyday he loved what he did and that’s what mattered and that’s what he would tell people. He lived happily ever after.

1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) Its is very interesting but origianle was tha kid there for a long time in the woods?
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2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think its very good mabey add more.

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? did this kid have a family or frinends befor the baseball team.

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?

Bailey - HA 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?) Loved your plot!!!!!!!!!!!! 2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed? I think that the story could have been more tense. 3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions? Your character was very likeable 4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see // and //hear // and //experience // the story? I think you have a good story. 5. What areas of the story need the most improvement? It was all good

**Starting May 1st (2008):** googlyeyes 1. Think of plot—is it original? (If an adaptation, is it creative or interesting to you?)

2. Think about problems that the characters face. Are there complications that add enough suspense, tension, or interest? Is there a climax that satisfies you? Is the resolution satisfying? What could be added or changed?

3. Think of characterization—are the characters life-like? Are characters likable and enjoyable? Do we get a good sense of character from many of these: description, dialogue, narrator's opinion, discussion from other characters, the character’s own actions?

4. Think of imagery and details. Do they help you //see// and //hear// and //experience// the story?

5. What areas of the story need the most improvement?