HA-Grace

**Hi I'm Grace Age: 12 School: Hawkesdale p-12 College Favourite soda: Diet coke Favourite lolly: Anything!!!!! Favourite food: Spaghetti and pizza Football team: Geelong cats!!!!!!!!! THE BEST TEAM IN THE WORLD!!!!! Pets: 3 dogs,** **5 chooks, 4 ducks, 1 fish and 1 budgie!!! The best pet in the world!!!! Siblings: 2 brothers and 1 sister**

One fine sunny day, on top of a steep hill, 2 little dudes were having races to see who could get to the bottom first. They lived right up the top of that very steep hill. Every day they would go outside and have races no matter what the weather was.  One day when they were rolling down the hill little Levi got a knife that someone dropped up his rear end. He was screaming so loud that her mum came rushing out to see what had happened. She saw little Levi kicking and screaming struggling to speak. Mum ran back inside and called 000 as quickly as she could and rushed back outside to see if she could help little Levi. The ambulance came straight away and took Levi to the hospital. The next day lee was ready to come home. Levi was home and once again they started to roll down that hill. While everyone was outside having fun, a robber had broken into the upstairs window and stolen all mum’s jewellery. That robber was never to be seen again. When mum went upstairs she noticed everything was scattered all over the floor. She didn’t really care. The end

Responses

Saint Michael School
1. On the level of story-telling: if you were the King (or the aliens), would you allow this story-teller to live another day? If no,why not? no it was too short

2. Be specific, try not to merely write, " this was good", instead explain what was good about it and why. It was good

3. Nominate "Hall of Fame" stories.no

